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This week's reading task was to read two other students' paragraphs that were completed last week! We had to then give feedback on their paragraphs! I found this hard as I really didn't know what to correct people on or suggest! But hopefully the feedback I gave helped (I am sorry if it did not).
In terms of the feedback I got, both of the bits of feedback I received were similar so which does help me a lot. The first bit was to take out the start of one sentence where I said "Papers I have read suggest" and honestly I'm not sure why I even put that in because I know you shouldn't use I in them but look we all make mistakes. So I took that out and changed it to "Different papers suggest". I hope that works better and makes more sense. Similar to that I was told to remove any she/he written in the paper as it was confusing so I also removed them.
Another bit of feedback I got was to stick to the 5 sentence feedback structure. I used the 5 sentence structure while writing them, looking over them now I do have more than 5 sentences in most paragraphs but I did follow the structure but instead of say 1 sentence of meat I did 2 or 3 depending on the paragraph.
Other than the changes I made, I am happy with my paragraphs and hope they come across well.
Thanks for reading!
-Megan :)
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